Jumat, 14 Oktober 2011

My memorable moment

            The most memorable moment in my life is when I watched the concert of Super Junior. On June, 4th 2011, Super Junior held a mini concert in Jakarta, so me and Suaidah went to watch that concert. The concert’s venue was located in Istora Senayan Stadium. The concert started at 6 PM, but we went there at 9 AM because we should wait in the queue to enter the Stadium. It was a long time, for we should wait from morning until evening. The concert held for 3 hours. It was became my memorable moment in my life because I could meet Super Junior, one of my favorite boybands from Korea. The another reason is when all of Super Junior members tried to speak in Indonesian language. They tried to introduce themself one by one in Indonesian language. But the most thing I can’t forget is when Donghae, one of Super Junior members said that Indonesian girls is very beautiful in Indonesian language. I thought it was very cute when he said that. Actually, the biggest reason why it was became the most memorable moment in my life is because I could meet Donghae, my favorite member of Super Junior. It was unbelievable thing in my life that I could meet him directly. Although it was a short time, it was became one of the happy days in my life. That’s my story about the most memorable moment in my life.

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         I watched the concert of Super Junior.
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Posted by Nurul Mutmainah at 18.20

1 komentar:

  1. Refika Amaleea Fitri17 Oktober 2011 pukul 15.04

    It's such a dream comes true then.I like ur writing as it's well organized and well developed. U describe each supporting sentence clearly, and em glad for that. U also nicely put appropriate CS. However, u still have to pay a heed to your grammar, mostly if it deals with the S-V agreement,and the rule of proper and common noun.It is correct if u use the capital letter ti the word Stadium as it refers to specific place "Istora Senayan Stadium". By contrast, u have to use the small letter to the word stadium here "to enter the Stadium" as it belongs to common noun. Overall, it's a good paragraph:-)

    BalasHapus

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