I want to tell you about my friend. She is one of my classmates whose name Nurjanah. I always call her Janah. She lives in Bekasi. She is the second daughter in her family. She has an older sister. She is a good and cheerful girl. She is one of beautiful girls in my class. That's my opinion because she has bright skin,big eyes,and pointed nose. Her hobbies are reading comics and eating sweet food. She likes all about Japan,such as Japanese culture,Japanese food,Japanese movie,Japanese music,and Japanese anime. She really wants to go to Japan one day because she wants to meet L'arc-en-ciel,one of Japanese group bands. She told me that she has a ambition to become a success woman. I hope her dream will be come true. That's some information which I can give about my friend,Nurjanah.
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BalasHapusIt is a good writing! But, I think it can be better for you to use more conjunctions which can relate each sentence.
BalasHapusThank you nabil. I will do your advice in my writing product next time,so that my writing can be better.
BalasHapusNice writing with clear description, yet u talk more about her hobbies instead of saying something about her beauty (look at ur title). U hafta organize ur writing more so, the readers can easily get the sharp point on what u a writing. I do agree with Nabil. U need to use more conjunctions as well as transition signals to develop ur TS. However, it's g'd try as ur writing is free from grammar. Good:-)
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